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高分范文赏析：小孩应该学会竞争还是合作？
2007-08-04 09:25:08 来源：未知 |
Should children be taught to compete or cooperate?
Whether children should be taught to compete or cooperate has been a long-running topic that triggers a very contentious discussion. People can hardly reach an absolute consensus and therefore it is wise to take a closer look at the arguments on both sides before I present my opinion.
Proponents of competition claim that competition is inevitable; it is human nature. Whether or not we like competition, the fact is we live in a competitive world in general, and a competitive society in particular, and it makes sense that we help our children develop qualities that will help them deal with the "wins" and "losses" they will surely encounter as they develop. Secondly, competition brings out the best in us for it provides an environment where we can strive for excellence and it strengthens the ideal of equality of opportunity. Last of all, competition is deemed as the major source of progress and prosperity.
On the other hand, supporters of cooperation argue that competition means my success is your failure. Competition is actually destructive to children’s self-esteem. It interferes with learning, sabotages relationships and isn’t necessary for a good time. If children are told that the most important thing in life is winning, it can lead to breaking the law or being dishonest in order to win. For those who don’t win, it develops an attitude of failure. If children feel they have to be constantly competitive, they will lose interest in learning. Children will not learn to trust others and to work as a group for a common purpose. With excessive competition, there may be more fights and violence among children. Actually, research shows that cooperation raises standards, and promotes higher achievement than competition. Competition may lower standards because it increases anxiety, and prevents us from sharing useful information. Moreover, surveys show that successful people, outside of sports, love a challenge, but they are not motivated by winning. Succeeding and beating others are not the same.
From the above discussion, we can see that both competition and cooperation have their merits. Personally, I am in favor of the latter view. We should educate children that they are for rather than against one another, equip them with the skills to resolve their conflicts
范文赏析：
1、文章由四段组成，属于典型的ARGUMENT。第一段开门见山，引出争论的话题：小孩应该学会竞争还是合作？第二和第三段对争论双方的论点和论据进行了详尽的阐述。值得一提的是，作者花在第三的笔墨明显多于第二段，有较强的倾向性。最后一段总结，表明作者的立场。文章结构完整，论证全面客观。
2、文章的关键部位均能较好地运用套句，为读者指明文章发展的方向，标黑体的部分为套句。恰当地使用这些佳句，一方面起到SIGNPOST的作用，同时使文章条理清晰，层次感强。
3、文章用词多样化，句式各异。作者对复杂句式把握得恰到好处，善于换用不同的表达方式，用词准确
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